I am a bit suspicious about the number of syllables in the second line, I know you can say pale all in one go, and ditto with steel, but both together seems like he's cheating.
Yes, I don't know if that counts. Though earlier in the chapter he does wonder this about 'tires' and 'wail' , so it's supposed to be an effort, not a perfect haiku.
I really don't know enough about it. I've picked up enough to know that the japanese system doesn't translate to syllables exactly, and afaict all english systems are approximations.
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Date: 2005-11-16 02:32 pm (UTC)I am a bit suspicious about the number of syllables in the second line, I know you can say pale all in one go, and ditto with steel, but both together seems like he's cheating.
Yes, I don't know if that counts. Though earlier in the chapter he does wonder this about 'tires' and 'wail' , so it's supposed to be an effort, not a perfect haiku.
I really don't know enough about it. I've picked up enough to know that the japanese system doesn't translate to syllables exactly, and afaict all english systems are approximations.