Mar. 11th, 2005
I've finished Maurice Saldini. I won't say I've done, but I can't see any way of improving it. The last chapter (4) came together last night.
Plot summary: Maurice is a vampire, and a private eye in the broke, smoking, by the seat of his pants tradition of old films. He's also rather pedantic :)
There's a taster here: http://www.srcf.ucam.org/~jv233/fic/saldini_chap_1.html
The whole thing is still in rtf unfortunately, but can be downloaded from here:
It's reached 12.5 kwords, or one eighth of a novel :) I enjoyed it, though it took long to write for a relatively short story.
There's no obligation to offer feedback, but I would be very grateful if you did feel like it. Questions you may want to consider include:
Did you enjoy it?
Did the plot make sense?
Which characters did you like? Dislike?
Should use less 'jacklike' langauge?
Should it be longer?
What should Rat be called?
Which character is most like me/you? :)
Do you want to go through it highlighting in red every spelling/grammatical mistake and send it back to me?
Do the chapters end too abruptly?
Should I write another one?
Squee, vampires?
Narcisistic spraff?
Is it like a deathcircus?
Tickybox!?
PS. I hate the way microsoft products have to insert several kilobytes of crap into everything, though thank you for the spell check. I thought "Wow, I'm at 90kb!" but 20kb of that was superfluous rtf tags.
Plot summary: Maurice is a vampire, and a private eye in the broke, smoking, by the seat of his pants tradition of old films. He's also rather pedantic :)
There's a taster here: http://www.srcf.ucam.org/~jv233/fic/saldini_chap_1.html
The whole thing is still in rtf unfortunately, but can be downloaded from here:
It's reached 12.5 kwords, or one eighth of a novel :) I enjoyed it, though it took long to write for a relatively short story.
There's no obligation to offer feedback, but I would be very grateful if you did feel like it. Questions you may want to consider include:
Did you enjoy it?
Did the plot make sense?
Which characters did you like? Dislike?
Should use less 'jacklike' langauge?
Should it be longer?
What should Rat be called?
Which character is most like me/you? :)
Do you want to go through it highlighting in red every spelling/grammatical mistake and send it back to me?
Do the chapters end too abruptly?
Should I write another one?
Squee, vampires?
Narcisistic spraff?
Is it like a deathcircus?
Tickybox!?
PS. I hate the way microsoft products have to insert several kilobytes of crap into everything, though thank you for the spell check. I thought "Wow, I'm at 90kb!" but 20kb of that was superfluous rtf tags.