The first paragraph confused me, but I soon got into it and liked it. I don't like the 'X: blah blah blah; Y: uh huh' format, but you dropped that quite quickly.
Like the 'piles of paper' jokes. I adore the 'wizard not bright enough to go mwahaha' joke.
Some of the phrasing is a little awkward - it's not always immediately obvious what's going on, but you said you're planning another edit, so I'm guessing you'll pick up on stuff then.
Um, I'm about a third through but am really tired - will read more tomorrow
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Date: 2005-04-18 09:57 pm (UTC)Like the 'piles of paper' jokes. I adore the 'wizard not bright enough to go mwahaha' joke.
Some of the phrasing is a little awkward - it's not always immediately obvious what's going on, but you said you're planning another edit, so I'm guessing you'll pick up on stuff then.
Um, I'm about a third through but am really tired - will read more tomorrow