Shrot story - Quarrisan

[jack]

This is the first writing I've finished for a while. It's a short story set in the world of Flewt and Gerald, exploring the way the metaphysics enables the formation of "gods".

Many thanks to calamarain for coming up with the names Maraya, Pilkos, Trulecta, Mim-Natos and Quarrisan! The names led soon to the personalities, and then there was little left for me to do. Though I'd still assert it's my copyright if anyone asks :) Stories abotu Maraya (the healing Godess) and Mim-Natos (the nearest equivalent to bargaining with the devil) will follow.

Any feedback, if you didn't follow the magic system, or didn't click with the characters, is welcome. Who did you think was the main character?

Quarrisan

The first of the gods was not Maraya the Kindest, though few in the world have not murmured her name at some point in their life. The dark cloistered orders of Mim-Natos Who Tempts say he touches all things, but in fact, gods and men grew together.

Historians point to Tyraphus and Trent, saying they are the same, and Trent drove game for hunters before the cities were built, but in fact Trent withered and Tyraphus filled his place, but does not remember the earliest times.

Many of our soldiers and citizens worship Tyraphus, but few talk to him. Blood sacrifices at the start of battle have made themselves felt, but his stout personality does not warm to a dedicated priesthood, and especially not magi. He must have seeped in to the world through a thousand accidental spells, as surely no magus would have affinity for him.

Still, there are some warriors with enough talent that they aim to direct their sacrifices, and a friend of mine caroused throughout the City of Diamonds with one once, and told me what he heard.

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Comments

[calamarain.livejournal.com]

Thank ye very much :) Just one thing though - I'm calamarain, not calamarin.

[cartesiandaemon.livejournal.com]

Doh! I was expecting lj to catch something like that... Edited.

Do you have any more names? I liked those: interesting, loaded with meaning, with a similar flavour, yet distictive from each other :)

[calamarain.livejournal.com]

Hmmmm... I'm not sure what you mean... I just churned them out randomly, off the top of my head, by combining syllables in a reasonably similar structure If you want some more though, feel free to pick some out from these little sets of similar ones. (again, just randomly created now)

1) Al-Meshahi, Kakal, Mehemeti, Mohansa, Quahallaran

2) Mortigan, Bethelby, Tommersin, Witherbrak, Seringford, Rodgel

3) Fondan, En-Sabati, Tumaka, Viru, Ramesut

4) D'raka, Ten'Pring, Mor-Mori, Na'Ati, El-Zidar

5) Surevok, Hulinga, Prujuti, Culminut, Dudun, Poriam

6) Zalaxi, Maquiel, Payaxren, Golguza, Qualabesque, Nezu

Any of these any help?

[cartesiandaemon.livejournal.com]

Sorry, that is, I didn't mean to imply you'd put any thought into it, just that they came out well. But they were just right for that story.

Yes, some of those look like they'll find a home in the pantheon. Thanks!

[calamarain.livejournal.com]

Cool :) Glad to be of assistance.

[miss-next.livejournal.com]

My goodness - that's a talent for which most fantasy and SF writers would give their eye teeth! I always find it quite hard to produce names. I'm impressed.

[calamarain.livejournal.com]

I really didn't think it was that much of a big deal! :)

[cartesiandaemon.livejournal.com]

Though I hope Roger won't take it as any less of a compliment if I say there's diminishing returns. Each of the half-dozen he gave me before might sustain a 3000 word story, but if I use these I'll probably cherry pick to some extent.

Perhaps everyone has a reasonable quote of coming up with names, but authors use it up soon, and Roger hasn't for a while, so came out with a really wonderful offering all at once :)

[calamarain.livejournal.com]

*grin* It doesn't matter how many crap names you come out with, as long as you can pick out the one good name from there. That was my idea :)

[emperor]

Will you be shrot for the typo? :)