Worldbuilding

[jack]

I really enjoyed writing those long musings on the history of the world. It's funny, I often do, though I'm not quite sure if they're *for* anything. They're deliberately too light on mechanical details for a roleplaying campaign and too light on plot for a book.

And they're a bit long for livejournal; it's almost automatic for your eyes to glaze over at the first paragraph and skip past.

I'm particularly curious to know if anyone did read them, and if so had any thoughts. (It's ok, pippa, I know you were going to tell me about the language later.)

(1) The names, the veil albicant, etc. Could they be less facile or less pretentious? Any suggestions? I like them for being adjective last if nothing else :)

(2) The religion. I tried to make a world with a more definite afterlife, but where Christianity is both immediately obviously relevant, and yet still a matter of faith and trust in God. Was anyone offended? Did anyone find it sympathetic?

(3) The renaissance. Anyone want to suggest any specific people to appropriate? I slipped Descartes in, but didn't try to give too much detail, I knew it wouldn't be accurate.

Comments

[chess]

I read them and enjoyed them. They're on the other side from fiction of short stories which are there to display a nifty idea (like the ones in Axiomatic) and as I like that kind of story I like the worldbuilding scraps.

[cartesiandaemon.livejournal.com]

Thank you!