Look what I did - Graveyard Shift, Chapter 2

This chapter is the first one I thought of and later, the first one I wrote. It's not my *favorite* now I've written the rest, but I do like it.

Colon and Nobby walked into Hide Park. There was a nervous cluster of men standing around a small wide box on which a voluminously valkyrian woman was standing with a speaking trumpet and a small whistle.
 "That's not them, is it?" asked Colon.
 "Of course not. There aren't any women."
 SQWEEEE! went the whistle. Several men clapped their hands to their ears.
 "GOOD MORNING, GENTLEMEN," blared the valkyrie. "WELCOME TO THE DEBUT OF THE AKNH-MORPORK TRADITONAL FOLK DANCING FOR BALLROOMS SOCIETY. IS THAT TWO MORE AT THE BACK?"
Continued...

I've duplicated the poll as well. You don't have to vote again, but are very welcome to if you want to reinforce your original choice or change your mind.

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